仙仙 发表于 2013-5-8 11:47:05

is this kidney transplant necessary?

这是我一个同学写给我改的一篇小短文,看到这篇文章我感到很感动.一方面我被文中的故事感动,另一方面我感动于她英语的进步.从开学到现在,她差不多坚持每周写两篇作文给改,现在我明显看到她进步了,我感到很欣慰!这篇文章我改动较少.本来自己也很有感触想大刀阔斧地把整篇文章改写一遍,特别是后面感想部分,可是后来一想,还是不要了,这毕竟是我同学的努力之作,我要尽量保持她原有的风格.呵呵.希望她不断进步.where there isa will, there is a way.
Today ,Irecalledathought-provoking   newsthatduetomanyyearsofhard   work ,amother of oversixtyyearsoldsufferedfromuremia andkidneytransplantwas desperately needed .Hersonwho wasjustthirtyyears old donatedoneofhiskidneystohismother .
   Afterreadingthisnews ,somepeople ,especiallysomeyoungpeoplemightthinkthatitisnotworthwhileforthesontodonateoneofhiskidneytohismother . Theyarguethattheyoungman stillhasalongwaytogo , whilehismotherhasalmostapproachedtheendofherlife , hencehersonneedn’t sacrifice so enormously in view of his future life. It is well known that lacking a normal kidney means tremendous inconvenience in all aspects of life. .
   However, in my opinion, those people are far too selfish.Theyhavebeentakingtheirparents’loveanddevotionforgrantedeversincetheywerechildren, and miserly give their parents love anddevotionwhentheirparentsneedthem. Fromthenews ,wecanseethatthesonhassetanexcellentexampleforthe   younggeneration   nowadays. Therefore ,Ihope   youngpeopletodaycanlearnfromthesonanddosomethingfortheirparents .It is worth the candle .
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